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Permalink Reply by Noah Miller on December 7, 2007 at 4:32pm

Hey Blunt folks! I'm sad to say outLoud is on break right now, so it'll be pretty quiet from our corner during this first episode of the Audio Exchange -- but I'm super thrilled to listen to the pieces! Thanks for posting. NM

Permalink Reply by Jamie on December 12, 2007 at 12:33pm

Hey I've just listened to "Guitar and me." Here are some suggestions: I really like the story line because i think its very personal and it also gives us background on your story. I really liked how you showed in the beginning you waiting for your brother to teach you something new, and as time goes on you are able to teach him something new. I also liked the fact that you showed how guitar started out for you and how it progressed through time. However, I think you may need to make a few minor edits such as adding room tone and making your fades less sudden which will make the piece flow smoother. It would also be interesting to hear some music in your piece such as you playing guitar, or some heavy metal that you seem to really enjoy. I really enjoyed you piece overall.

Permalink Reply by Alejandra on December 12, 2007 at 12:33pm

Hey, well your pieces were interesting. The guitar piece was well done I like the way the guy says how he always wanted to learn how to play guitar but no one ever thought him but then he went to a mental hospital and he learned there to play I thought that was very personal of you and nice to share with us so we will have an idea were you learned how to play. I also like the way how you share that famous phrase that your mothers friend said.Also it would be nice if you add some of your music like you playing your guitar so we know how good you became to be.

Permalink Reply by jennifer on December 12, 2007 at 12:33pm

Hey!

I just listened to 'guitar and me' and i really enjoyed it. The part of this piece that rally stood out at me was when he says that guitar playing has really helped him cope with being in jail. It was deep and really made me feel how music can really touch somebody and that music is so important in someone's life.What i found so surpsising was that the guy at the mental hospital taught him more than his brother ever had. To later come home and teach his older brother, that is deep. A suggestion i have is to add a little music it will make the piece much more interesting and personal.

Permalink Reply by Eric on December 12, 2007 at 12:33pm

Hey folks!

Your pieces were pretty straight. The one with the guy and the guitar was interesting because it is great about how music changes lives. I'm a musician/composer myslef and I undertstand what he is saying. The only drawbacks are that after each sentence, you kinda faded out and back in and there wasn't any room tone and don't get me wrong, its great and I liked that little trick but a little bit of room tone can help. Also, if you could've gotten him playing his guitar that would've helped a lot in the sence of music and in the sence of going deeper into why he likes music so much. But overall: GREAT!

Permalink Reply by Claire Holman on December 13, 2007 at 11:00am

Hey all,

A few people have commented that the piece Guitar and Me lacks music. That's my fault; I guess we posted the wrong one. I'll try to get the right one up soon.

Thanks for your feedback.
Bye for now,
Claire

Permalink Reply by Chris Flynn on December 13, 2007 at 1:39pm

Hey.

After listening to the pieces, I was pretty impressed with the quality of the pieces. All were enjoyable and informal, and were well done. For Guitar and Me I thought the beginning was kind of catchy for some reason, and through the whole thing, he came across as confident. But some of the pauses came in at bad times, and there was some stuttering. The biggest problem for me was his tone was monotonous, albiet his words were confident. Still a good piece.

For Homeless in Maine, I thought it was very informal and gave you an idea how people viewed homelessness. It also started great, bringing those questions into your mind. All it needs is a little work on the fades during the interviews.

And finally, Letters from Texas was my favorite of these. I think it had more emotion in piece than the other two, and it was touching. The only problems are the lyrics distract you some times, and the final fade cuts him off. All in all, a real good piece.

Permalink Reply by Berenice Garcia on December 13, 2007 at 1:42pm

This goes to "My Guitar and Me" I really enjoyed the story behind it, it was very personal. The part that stood out the most and was excellent was the part where you described your friend's mom. The way you said and emphazised how important music is was wonderful! A little advice is just to add a bit more concrete images like you did with the mom. Also, if you can slow down your talking pace just a bit.
Homelessness in Maine: I loved your intro. It was catchy and energetic. The fact that you had that vox of different peoples' opinions on homeless people was awesome! I would have loved to hear more actual homeless people talking.
Letters from Texas: The music was a wonderful choice, but when you started talking and you still had the music under your voice I was a bit distracted trying to listen to the words of the song. It was such a touching story though. I loved the topic and your voice; it made it so much more real! A little technical suggestion is the fade at the end was sudden and caused the music to start too sudden.

Permalink Reply by Chris Cuello on December 13, 2007 at 1:42pm

I was intrested in the guitar piece because he came across confident when he spoke and he gave good concrete images. I like the one part when he was talking about the time when he and his friend were playing the guitar all summer and the friends mother telling the boys to either turn down the guitar or turn it off. The bad parts were the fades because when you faded out they were to quick and cut him off. The piece was intresting.

For Homeless in Maine the part of her piece that caught me was her lead-in because she went right out and asked abiut the problem of homeless people in Maine. The only bad parts were the fades.

For letters from Texas it was intresting because the producer was locked up and reading personal letters from friends. What really caught me was he made you feel like you were reading the letters with him. The bad he sounds a little uncertain reading.

Permalink Reply by Davis Garcia on December 13, 2007 at 1:43pm

Your pieces were great. Altough you need some room for more improvment. The story I really liked the most is "Letters from Texas" the choice of music is excellent altough its quite annoying. I was paying attention more to the lyrics of the song rather than the actual story. You might want to cut down the song and only include a part of instrumentals. Loop it and copy it. Then the the piece wil still have music, only without lyrics. Fades start to soon in the begginning of the piecs. Some mic noise was heard in the middle of the piece. The major problem is the ending. The speaker isn't even done talking while the music levels go up.

Permalink Reply by ×--Frankcarlo on December 13, 2007 at 1:43pm

Hola,

Well I listened to to all your pieces and they are all pretty good. In my personal opinion "Guitar and Me" is a very interesting idea and piece, the story is very intriguing but to make it more effective I think you could have shorten it. In some parts you seem to repeat yourself or ramble on, a tip I could give you is to have more concrete images. Describe to us everything around you. Also be careful with your voice "popping" and your audio levels at times are to high. Other than that it's a promising piece that I enjoyed.


The Homelessness in Maine piece was my favorite. I think you did a very good job in getting a good attention grabbing intro and the vox pop complemented this. I like how you went out and got an actual person who lived this.
Well it was great, keep 'em coming!

Permalink Reply by Sylhery Padilla on December 13, 2007 at 1:50pm

Hey!

Your pieces are pretty nice. In "Guitar and me" i really enjoyed the fact that it was concrete, realistic, and connected well with the listener. I have a few suggestions: Maybe watch the levels in your piece and watch out for the pop in the beginning, slow down a bit more when you speak. I would of really liked it if you were a bit more discriptive.

In "Homeless in main" Your beginning was very interesting. The choice of questions was a good way to "hook" the listener. My suggestions to better your piece would be to again watch your levels and room tone, and when you switch from one person to another fade the voices a bit more.

"Letters from texas" was my favorite. The music was really nice, the mood and tone was also really good. Awsome piece in general. You should watch your fades when you end, maybe lower the higher the music and have a longer fade out.. Besides that, i thought it was really awsome.

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